Jedi Master of the Republic

[Derek Skirata]

This is an idea that I had that's based on the novel "The Count of Monte Cristo" & I was wondering what that same storyline would be like if it was Star Wars. So here it is:

Prologue

"For over a thousand generations the Jedi Knights were the guardians of peace & justice in the Old Republic. Before the Dark Times. Before the Empire."

The Jedi Knights were the guardians of peace & justice in the Old Republic & have been for a thousand generations. However there was always a threat that threatens the existence of the Galactic Republic & the Jedi Order: the Sith. The Sith have two goals: destroy the Jedi Order & conquer the galaxy. However it seemed like their plans for eternal galactic domination have failed miserably. But little did the entire galaxy know that two Jedi would be changing the face of the galaxy forever. They were two brothers: Jerek & Darrel.

Both were from the planet of Taris born to a wealthy family. They were found by a pair of Jedi Masters & then were brought to Coruscant to be trained. They showed remarkable progress & by the time they reached adult age they were promoted to Jedi Knight. Jerek later befriended & fell in love with another Jedi named Chrissie. She is only a year younger than Jerek but she also was promoted to Jedi Knight the same year as Jerek. Darrel tried to woo her but Jerek won Chrissie's heart.

As the years went by, Darrel confessed that his dream is to be a Jedi Master on the High Council. Both Jerek & Chrissie accepted Darrel's dream & encouraged him to follow his dream. By the time Darrel & Jerek reached their mid 20's, they start to feel that their time of being Jedi Knights is coming to an end & their time of being Jedi Masters is near....


Chapter 1: Old Lessons

"Training to become a Jedi is not an easy challenge. Even if you succeed, it's a hard life." - Qui-Gon Jinn

Darrel stood in the middle of the Jedi dueling arena, his cloak covering his body & his hood covering his head & concealing his face. Behind him is his brother Jerek with the same cloak. Jerek slowly walked towards his brother & ignited his lightsaber. He tried to strike at him with his lightsaber but Darrel blocked the blow, the purple blade locked with his brother's blue blade. Jerek then tried to stab at his brother's torso but Darrel blocked the stab & tried to slash at Jerek's shoulder. Jerek easily blocked it & tried to make a 360 degree spin slash. Darrel dodged it & tried to strike again when they both heard a voice. "Hey you two!" It was Chrissie.

Chrissie walked into the room with her cloak on but her hood down. Her red hair was flowing on her shoulders & her green eyes staring at the two brothers. "When are you gonna give me a turn?" "Oh Chrissie, don't worry." Jerek chuckled. "Once we're done sparring I'll take ya." "Not if I beat ya first!" Darrel countered, chuckling & smiling. "Oh come on, you guys. You guys are always sparring. Why don't ya let a real Jedi spar?" Chrissie asked, her smile already widening as she still stared at Jerek. "OK OK!" Jerek surrendered, deactivating his lightsaber. "You'll go against me." "Oh c'mon man! You went up against her last time!" Darrel spoke. "Relax I was only kidding." Jerek laughed, playfully hitting Darrel on the shoulder with Darrel grabbing the shoulder in mock-pain.

Both Chrissie & Darrel walked into the middle of the dueling room & ignited their lightsabers. They charged at each other & struck. Darrel's purple blade bounced off Chrissie's green. Darrel did a 360 spin strike at Chrissie's torso but she dodged & blocked it. Chrissie then tried to strike at Darrel's leg but Darrel blocked it & countered the strike at Chrissie's left arm. She jumped to the side to avoid the strike. She then tried to stab at Darrel's neck but he bent backwards to avoid the stab. With Chrissie's green blade above his face Darrel slashed at the green blade & tried to slash at Chrissie's torso again when Master Eric walked into the room. "Sparring again, I presume?"

Master Eric was a middle-aged man who was barely in his mid 20's when he first trained his then-Padawan Jerek. He wielded a yellow lightsaber & despite his age he is still one of the best swordsman in the Jedi Order. He also had a great command of the Force & always had a sense of humor. He also was one of the Jedi High Councilors. "Yeah." Darrel answered, switching off his lightsaber. "We're just practicing." "I see." Master Eric spoke, his smile still on his face. "Well your techniques are still a little sloppy, but getting better. You three must remember your old lessons about what you do in the real world. Always remember that there are always alternatives to fighting."

"Yes, master." Jerek bowed. Master Eric walked out of the room & then the three Jedi Knights walked out as well. "You know that the Council is about to choose a new member of the High Council." Jerek reminded to Darrel as he walked with Chrissie, holding hands with her. "Yes I know." Darrel spoke. "I've waited for so long to be one of the Jedi chosen to sit with the other Masters." "Everyone knows you want to be a Jedi High Councilor." Chrissie reminded. "You talk about it every day." That's when her comlink beeped. "Oh, the Council needs me for a sec. I'll be back soon." Chrissie walked away with Darrel teasing his brother. "You're so lucky to have a woman like that." "I know." Jerek chuckled. "Y'know you're also lucky that you got her first. I could've won her heart." "Darrel, you'll find yourself a nice girl someday. But for now we must be patient if we all want to be promoted to Jedi Master." They both walked the opposite directions to their rooms.

[Darth Shivilow™]

If your gonna follow the Count of Monte Cresto is his brother gonna betray him??I would love to know if that turns out that way because I love the movie and book.

[Derek Skirata]

Well I can't reveal that yet... You'll have to wait & see.

BTW this is my 2,000th post! ;D

[Darth Shivilow™]

Yeah 2,00o maybe by july i'll make it up to 1,000 and then i'll get a double bladed saber yay for me.

[Derek Skirata]

Chapter 2: Across the Stars

"You might say that we are encouraged to love." - Anakin Skywalker

Jerek & Chrissie were walking outside, after the sun had setted. "My parents always took me to my favorite place right after the sun had setted when I was a kid." Chrissie described, holding Jerek's hand. "It was on a balcony at my grandparent's house. Of course that was a little before I came to the Jedi Order." "I remember that when I was just a young Padawan, Darrel & I would always come to this exact spot & try to find some shooting stars."

They walked until Jerek spotted a shooting star. "Shooting star. Quick, make a wish!" Chrissie closed her eyes & made her wish. Just as she opened her eyes she saw another shooting star. "Make a wish." Jerek closed his eyes for a moment. When he opened them he saw Chrissie smiling at him. "What did you wish for?" Jerek asked. "I wished for us to be married." Chrissie answered.

"I wished for us to be married too." Jerek answered. Chrissie's smile widened. Jerek smirked. "Anyway I do have a question for ya." He knelt down on his knee & pulled out a box. Inside was a ring with a small part of a blue lightsaber crystal on it. "Chrissie, will you marry me?" Chrissie was surprised. She put her hands to her mouth & she smiled. "Yes, I will marry you." She hugged Jerek & kissed him.

They looked up at the stars yet again, holding each other close & never letting go. To them, it seemed just like yesterday when they first met. At the time they never expected to fall in love. But they knew that even a Jedi can never control the feelings of the heart. They also just hoped that the news of their engagement won't cause any problems in the future.

[phoenixdarkside]

sweet so far dude

[Derek Skirata]

Chapter 3: Problems Arise

"Fear is the path to the dark side. Fear leads to anger, anger leads to hate, hate leads to suffering." - Yoda

The next day was perfect for the three Jedi Knights. They talked about what they're gonna do when they grow old. "Oh I almost forgot!" Jerek announced. He leaned in so only he, Chrissie, & Darrel can hear. "Chrissie & I are getting married." Darrel's expression went immediately to shock. "You two?" He spoke.

"Yup." Chrissie answered. Darrel smiled. "Congrats!" He shook both Jerek's & Chrissie's hands. "I sure hope you have a nice future." "Yeah, me too." Jerek answered. Then another Jedi approached. "Knights Jerek, Darrel, & Chrisse, you're needed in the Council Chambers. I think that they are gonna promote you three on that mission you three did."

Darrel's smile widened. "They're gonna make us Jedi Masters!" "Finally!" Chrissie spoke. "Well we were patient for this long." Jerek spoke. "We'll have to see how long until we're on the Council." "I hope I'll be on there very soon; I've been waiting for so long!" Darrel hoped. They got up & the trio walked to the Jedi Council Chambers.

They walked inside & saw all of the Masters, including Master Eric, sitting around them. The three Jedi Knights walked into the center of the Council. "Knight Jerek, Knight, Chrissie, & Knight Darrel." Master Daren, the Grand Master from Mon Calamari. "For your bravery on Muunilist, the Council is honored to promote you."

Master Daren turned to Chrissie. "Knight Chrissie...you are now Master Chrissie." Chrisse was smiling & the other two Knights congratulated her. "Thank you, Master Daren." Chrissie thanked. Master Daren then turned to Darrel. "Knight Darrel...you are now Master Darrel." Darrel nodded & Jerek congratulated him. Master Daren then turned to Jerek. "Knight Jerek...you are now Master Jerek....& not only that you are also promoted to the High Council." Jerek was surprised. "M-Me? Thank you, Masters!" Jerek smiled.

Darrel's smile immediately disappeared. "What?" Darrel asked, shocked & upset. "This is outrageous! It's unfair!! How can you promote him?! I did much more than he did out there!!" "Darrel...I mean...Master Darrel, please calm down." Chrissie spoke, trying to calm him down. "You'll be elected on the Council sooner than you think."

"Take your seat, Master Jerek." Master Eric spoke. Jerek moved & sat down at one of the empty seats. Darrel looked at him with contempt. "Let it go." Chrissie whispered. "You two are dismissed." Master Daren spoke. Chrissie bowed & walked out; Darrel just walked out with Chrissie.

"I don't believe this!" Darrel growled. "Who do they think they are?! Putting him on the council instead of me?! I did all of the work & he took all of the credit! It's insulting!!" "Calm down, Master." Chrissie pleaded. "It's not the end of the galaxy. Think of it this way: at least you got promoted to Master." "But not Master on the High Council." Darrel remarked. "Do you realize how long I've been waiting?!" "Master, Jerek will not be the only one to be on the Council." Chrissie explained. "You'll be elected on the Council sooner than you think. Trust me."

As Chrissie walked away she turned back to Darrel. "Darrel, I would try to control your anger & try not be jealous; those traits lead to the dark side. Remember what Master Daren taught you: Jealousy is the shadow of greed." Darrel said nothing as Chrissie walked away. "It changes nothing. They should've realized that I almost did the whole mission myself!!" Darrel walked away towards his quarters.

Meanwhile while the Council was adjourned, Jerek approached Master Daren & Master Eric. "Masters, a moment please?" The three Masters walked into one of the hallways that seems empty at the moment. "Masters, I'm getting a bad feeling about Darrel; he seems angry on your decision." "Master Darrel will finally see the wisdom in our decision in due time." Master Daren explained.

"But what if the worst should happen?" Jerek asked. "I sense anger in him. I fear he will give in to it & fall to the dark side." "Then you must try & council him." Master Eric suggested. "There is always a Master appointed to the High Council & I assure you that he is next as long as he lets go of his anger." Jerek bowed. "Yes, Master."

As Jerek left, Master Daren noticed Master Eric was staring out at the sunset, concerned. "Master Eric? What's wrong? You seem troubled." "I don't know why but I sense a plot to destroy the Jedi. The dark side of the Force is starting to surround Master Darrel." Master Eric answered. "If Master Jerek couldn't try & calm Master Darrel down then we should try our best to calm him down. If we fail..." Master Daren trailed off. "Then we'll lose another student. I don't want to see one of our newly promoted Masters to betray us. We'll have to try."

[greyjedi4life]

it was great i liked it very much

[Derek Skirata]

Chapter 4: Once You Start Down the Dark Path....

"Hard to see, the dark side is." - Yoda

Darrel just walked in the Council Chambers frustrated. He knew that he was the one who helped out Jerek & Chrissie on Muunilist. If it wasn't for him, they would still be on the planet right now, either prisoners or dead. He was the one who did almost all the mission by himself & yet his own brother Jerek took all the credit & ended up on the High Council, which is something that he deserved.

He walked to the center glaring at Jerek. Jerek just gave him a confused look. "Master Darrel that's enough." Master Eric told him. Darrel just gave an annoyed sigh & looked at Master Daren. "Master Darrel, I know how upset you are right now. But Master Gwen hasn't returned from her mission so we assumed the worst." Master Daren explained. "Your mission is to infiltrate a wealthy mob-like gang & see what happened to Master Gwen. If she is alive, we want you to return her safely."

"Not to mention that her seat on the high council is empty. If you find her corpse if she is dead, then you will be promoted to the High Council....after you confirm her status & arrest the crime lord in charge of the gang. Of course you'll also need evidence to make sure he gets convicted." Darrel's face lit up instantly; he was finally given the perfect opportunity to finally live his dream on the High Council.

"Yes, Master." Darrel bowed. "May the Force be with you." Jerek added. Darrel walked out, ignoring him but even wondering to himself as to why. Darrel had never ignored his own brother. Both were never in competition with each other. Jerek had dark brown hair & tan skin but Darrel had blonde hair & pale skin but so what? Jerek had their father's side & Darrel had their mother's side. Neither really cared since both brothers were happy about the way they look. They basically were about the same height, age, physical build. There is no reason for both of them to be jealous of each other.

Darrel walked out of the Temple & to his speeder that he recently bought....which also got some frowns from other Masters until they themselves got speeders, & flew off to the location where the crime lord's residence is located. However, Darrel parked it somewhere close & where he won't be detected. He carefully looked at nearby gang members. It will be impossible for him to get by them without them knowing since there were too many of them. Even worse, they were guarding the only entrance to the crime lord's mansion.

Darrel noticed that there was an unguarded sewer underneath them that most likely leads to an elevator that also leads into the building. Darrel knew he had to take that chance. He slowly lifted the door that leads to the sewers & jumped right in. He quickly but quietly ran past the storm drains where the gang members could look inside. However by the time they noticed, Darrel had already made it to the elevator. The guards have no idea about anyone infiltrating.

Darrel slowly walked up & sensed to see if there was anyone nearby. With the coast clear, he made his way to the upper levels. By the time he reached the crime lord's floor, he stopped & began to even think if they actually had no idea he was coming. "Getting to this floor was a little bit too easy." Darrel whispered to himself. "It's almost as if...." He looked at the entrance to the crime lord's office, which was strangely unlocked....& unguarded.

He used the Force to see if there was anyone inside. He sensed only one person inside & he knew no doubt it was the crime lord. When he sensed the crime lord was getting up & walking out of his office, Darrel quickly hid behind some plants. He cursed to himself quietly for hiding behind the last thing to hide behind but the crime lord simply walked past. Darrel was confused; how can one of the biggest crime lords in the city actually not notice Darrel behind a plant?

After crawling out, Darrel quickly ran into the office. "I dunno why but something is fishy about all this." He spoke to himself as he started to slice into the crime lord's main computer. "Somehow this is far too easy." He noticed that the silent alarm near the crime lord's desk was turned off & closer inspection indicated that it was shut off just before he left.

"Got the information that I need, but why are they making this easy?" He asked himself. He noticed a security camera but it too was turned off. He then noticed the whole security system was turned off. What was going on? Darrel was starting to think that this was a trap. So he quickly ran out & decided to find Master Gwen, wheter she is dead or alive.

He looked around in a room that somehow were the cells but then he heard clapping sounds....coming right behind him. "Bravo, Master Jedi. Bravo." a voice applauded. Darrel quickly turned around to see the crime lord, standing in the doorway. "I just got evidence to put you away for the rest of your life." Darrel growled. "Oh?" the crime lord laughed. "You mean....this man?" The crime lord's voice changed to a deeper & more sinister voice & pulled a corpse into the doorway. It was the crime lord.

"Who are you? What did you do?" Darrel started asking questions.

(more to come soon)